"CARRY ME"

DOUG’S ARRANGEMENTS, MIXES AND NOTES
(song is in Eb and tempo is 72 bpm)

This is the original demo that Kevin emailed Doug on March 7, 2021.

11/16/21 – Kevy, I think your lyrics are just fine as is; but below are some unfiltered suggestions that have popped into my head that you may or may not find helpful.

  1.  “There’s a home I should be going to” (Ending with a preposition doesn’t seem very lyrical – could this be reworded?)
  2.  “My directions seem so pointless” (Is there a better word than “pointless” or maybe use a different wording for the same thought?)
  3.  “She would gently lay beside me // Lay her hair upon my knees?” Could these lines be re-written? My thoughts: 1) the repeated use of the word “lay” – actually in the first line, grammatically the word should be “lie.” 2) How does one “gently lay?” Wouldn’t that mean placing something carefully down? I do know what you’re meaning, but might there be a better way to put it?
  4.  In the chorus: “And it’s resting that I need” (is there a better word than “resting”? It’s a participle/gerund and maybe a one or two-syllable noun would be better, e.g. comfort, solace, peace.
  5. I understand the point of your bridge, but I’m wondering if it could be fine-tuned, e.g., “And maybe by tomorrow, my guiding star will reappear // And if I am to follow, there’ll be one that’s oh so clear.”
  6. It’s the final verse that concerned me the most – and again, I understand where you’re coming from. But can this be stated in a different way that isn’t so literal? And maybe part of my problem with “She walks away from me” is the tense – present. It’s as though we have two, very important things happening concurrently: Your imperative in the chorus, “Carry me” and the final verse, “She walks away from me.” 
I know how frustrating it may be to have someone suggest changes in something that probably came as an inspiration, but I’m just offering another set of eyes and ears for perspective. As I said, I think your lyrics stand as is and would be appreciated by listeners. So, the above suggestions are just my two cents worth.
 
Doug
 
PS. Below are the lyrics as I hear them. Let me know if there should be any corrections.

Carry Me | Kevin Conner

These days I seem to wander
Over dark and lonely streets
The buildings are torn down
And if they’re not, they soon will be

There’s a weariness that haunts me,
And I don’t know where it leads,
There’s a home I should be going to
But it’s somewhere out of reach

I don’t know how to ask for guidance
I’ve been spinning round and round
My directions seem so pointless
As I’m neither lost nor found

There are times to take a lover
Times to leave that love alone
But your heart won’t know the difference
When you’re far away from home

So Carry Me, Carry Me
I am tired, I am weary
And it’s resting that I need
Carry Me, Carry Me,
If you’re willing and you’re able
There’s a favor that I need,
Carry Me

[new bridge] And I hope somewhere, sometime, someday,
I will find that someone who’ll bring me home to stay

* [original bridge:] And maybe by tomorrow, the stars will reappear
And if I have to follow, there’ll be one that’s oh so clear

I’m in my years of golden slumbers
Where I try to be at peace
She would gently lay beside me
Lay her head upon my knee

Now my heart is filled with sorrow
And my eyes cannot believe
I’ve seen my last tomorrow
As she walks away from me

So Carry Me, Carry Me
I am tired, I am weary
And it’s resting that I need
Carry Me, Carry Me,
If you’re willing and you’re able
There’s a favor that I need . . .

WEDNESDAY, NOVEMBER 17, 2021

On 11/17/2021 10:12 AM, Doug wrote:

 Kevy,

Oftentimes the interpretation of memorable lyrics is ambiguous – as with many of the Lennon-McCartney lyrics. I can imagine some well-intentioned friend in his inner circle saying to Lennon:

“Hmmmm, ‘yellow matter custard, dripping from a dead dog’s eye.’ I just don’t think that works, John. Just what are you trying to say? If you’re wanting to be writing a hit song, I think that imagery is just too disturbing. You might consider rewriting that line.”

So, even though one’s lyrics may be grammatically or logically flawed, a writer’s first instincts indeed may be ultimately the most-effective. But it doesn’t hurt to be open to suggestion.

Doug

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On 11/17/2021 5:39 AM, Kevin (kkconner@mchsi.com) wrote:
Thanks for the comments. I will look into some of your suggestions
and see what I can come up with. Couple things: the line is Lay her
"head" upon my knee. I really like the line My direction seems so pointless.
I do want to make sense with my lyrics but also there is poetic licensing
that I think applies to song writing. Just quick. I will look into this further.
Thanks for the feedback.

On 11/17/2021 11:46 AM, Doug wrote:

Hi Kevy,

Oh, I just remembered something I was going to add to yesterday’s comments:

On the LAST chorus, at the very end, what would you think of ending the song on the line:

“If you’re willing and you’re able
There’s a favor that I need . . .”

And omit the final “Carry me.”

Let the listener fill in the final words.

Doug

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On 11/17/2021 6:05 PM, Kevin wrote:

I really like that! (Leaving off Carry Me) And your previous email. You're exactly right.
It doesn't hurt to make a suggestion. I just left you the new bridge on your
answering machine. Completely different. I hope you can kinda make it out. I like it. 

FRIDAY, NOVEMBER 19, 2021

Kevin has written a new bridge for “Carry Me” and will be having Sean record the complete song this coming Monday (Nov 22) on his iPhone. Sean will then email me in the file.

MONDAY, NOVEMBER 22, 2021

Sean and Kylie Goldberg recorded Kevin re-doing a demo of “Carry Me.” This version has the new bridge and omits the final “Carry me” at the end.

TUESDAY, NOVEMBER 23, 2021

During a phone conversation, I’d suggested to Kevin that he swap stanzas 4 and 6 (see original lyric structure at top of page) so that the “Now my heart is filled with sorrow . . . “ stanza precedes the first chorus and that “There are times to take a lover . . . “ stanza precedes the final chorus.

He said he’d give the change some consideration.

WEDNESDAY, NOVEMBER 24, 2021

In a phone message this morning, Kevin agreed to swap stanzas 4 and 6; so the new lyric structure is shown below:

Carry Me | Kevin Conner

These days I seem to wander
Over dark and lonely streets
The buildings are torn down
And if they’re not, they soon will be

There’s a weariness that haunts me,
And I don’t know where it leads,
There’s a home I should be going to
But it’s somewhere out of reach

I don’t know how to ask for guidance
I’ve been spinning round and round
My directions seem so pointless
As I’m neither lost nor found

Now my heart is filled with sorrow
And my eyes cannot believe
I’ve seen my last tomorrow
As she walks away from me

So Carry Me, Carry Me
I am tired, I am weary
And it’s resting that I need
Carry Me, Carry Me,
If you’re willing and you’re able
There’s a favor that I need,
Carry Me

And I hope somewhere, sometime, someday,
I will find that someone who’ll bring me home to stay

I’m in my years of golden slumbers
Where I try to be at peace
She would gently lay beside me
Lay her head upon my knee

There are times to take a lover
Times to leave that love alone
But your heart won’t know the difference
When you’re far away from home

So Carry Me, Carry Me
I am tired, I am weary
And it’s resting that I need
Carry Me, Carry Me,
If you’re willing and you’re able
There’s a favor that I need . . .

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On 11/24/21 12:35 pm, Doug wrote:

Hi Kevy,

Interestingly, the tempos for your original demo and the one you just recorded the other day are identical, 72 bpm (one’s normal heart rate.) How apropos for a song from the heart.

I did get your phone message earlier today regarding swapping those two stanzas. This is not like changing the chords or song structure, so there’s nothing set in stone. You’ll have plenty of time to ruminate about that swap before we do the vocals on the finished mix – you may decide to keep the original lyric structure . . . or, who knows, maybe even do some rewriting.

What would Allen Ginsberg say? (Or haven’t you watched the McCartney interview yet?)

Doug 

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SUNDAY, NOVEMBER 28, 2021

On 11/28/21 10:25 pm, Doug wrote:

Kevy,

Just a quick update on “Carry Me.” Today (Sunday, Nov 28,) I’ve been working up a fairly literal version of your piano part – with all the pauses and syncopations, etc. I might have it ready to post sometime tomorrow (Monday.) It’s not going to be too exciting to listen to, but it’ll be a guide track. I’ll put a copy of it on the web page for you to listen to. You can make sure that the chords are all correct and that the pauses are the lengths you want them.

I’ll eventually use that track as a guide to build the arrangement around. And, as I’d mentioned before, I’ll work up some type of piano intro which probably will be a little longer that what you currently have.

All for now.

Doug

MONDAY, NOVEMBER 29, 2021

 

This audio file, “Carry Me 11-29-21.mp3”, is my transcription of Kevin’s original piano part. This is a guide to be sure I have all the chords, song structure and rhythms right before moving forward with the final arrangement.

My transcription of Kevin’s piano part for “Carry Me”

TUESDAY, NOVEMBER 30, 2021

I changed the Gmin7 chords at the beginning of the chorus to Eb (first inversions.) I also added an Eb (first inversion) preceding the bridge.

Also, I changed the instruments from the Yamaha NP-V80 general MIDI sounds to VI.One samples using Kontakt. Plus I worked a bit on the drum track.

WEDNESDAY, DECEMBER 1, 2021

1. Added piano intro
2. Added low strings
3. Fine-tuned drum track

FRIDAY, DECEMBER 3, 2021

  1. This is “Carry Me 2 12-3-21.mp3”
  2. New bridge section
  3. Took drums and strings out of the 3rd verse.
  4. Modified piano part immediately preceding the bridge.

MONDAY, DECEMBER 6, 2021

Kevin has decided to go back to the original lyric structure (below) retaining two notable changes:

1) the “hanging” line at the very end “There’s a favor that I need . . .”

2) the modified lyric for the bridge: “I hope somewhere, sometime, someday . . .” to conform with the new bridge arrangement.

Carry Me | Kevin Conner

These days I seem to wander
Over dark and lonely streets
The buildings are torn down
And if they’re not, they soon will be

There’s a weariness that haunts me,
And I don’t know where it leads,
There’s a home I should be going to
But it’s somewhere out of reach

I don’t know how to ask for guidance
I’ve been spinning round and round
My direction seems so pointless
As I’m neither lost nor found

There are times to take a lover
Times to leave that love alone
But your heart won’t know the difference
When you’re far away from home

Carry Me, Carry Me
I am tired, I am weary
And it’s resting that I need
Carry Me, Carry Me,
If you’re willing and you’re able
There’s a favor that I need,
Carry Me

[bridge] I hope somewhere, sometime, someday . . .

I’m in my years of golden slumbers
Where I thought I’d be at peace
She would gently lie beside me
Lay her head upon my knee

Now my heart is filled with sorrow
And my eyes cannot believe
I’ve seen my last tomorrow
As she walks away from me

Carry Me, Carry Me
I am tired, I am weary
And it’s resting that I need
Carry Me, Carry Me,
If you’re willing and you’re able
There’s a favor that I need . . .

TUESDAY, DECEMBER 7, 2021

  1. Added nylon-string guitar part
  2. Lowered bass guitar
  3. Panned piano slightly to right.
  4. Panned nylon-string guitar slightly to left.
  5. Added tambourine to last chorus.

THURSDAY, DECEMBER 16, 2021

  1. Added Storia III acoustic guitar.
  2. Cleaned up timing on nylon-string guitar track.
  3. Lowered volume level of bass.
  4. Removed nylon-string guitar from bridge.

FRIDAY, DECEMBER 17, 2021

This mix, “Carry Me 3 with Kevin’s vocal 12-17-21.mp3”, was done after Kevin had left the recording session. What I did:
1. Aligned, trimmed and pitch-corrected harmony vocals.
2. Cloned Kevin’s lead vocal and put on separate track with pitch correction.
3. Changed vocal reverb on Kevin’s lead vocal.
4. Changed compressor or Kevin’s lead vocal.
5. Edited out extraneous noises on vocal and harmony tracks. 

SATURDAY, JANUARY 1, 2022

This mix is “Carry Me 1-1-22.mp3.”
1. Added Doug’s harmony vocals
2. On first chorus, cut out harmonies on “Carry me” and left the “response” oooooo’s.
3. Did a minor tweak on the nylon string guitar track – brought out a “sixth” lick on final verse right after “lay her head upon my knee.”

SUNDAY, JANUARY 2, 2022

This mix is “Carry Me 1-2-22.mp3”
1. Mixed down the “response” oooo’s on the first chorus.
2. Added low strings (cello, viola and violin) on final refrain in the last chorus.
3. Added bass slide to low Ab at fadeout.
4. Used different reverb on lead vocal.
5. Used Ozone 3 preset “CD Master” during mixdown to mp3.

THURSDAY, JANUARY 6, 2022

This mix is “Carry Me B 1-6-22.mp3”
1. Fixed pitch correction artifact on “There are times to take a lover” at 1:05.
2. Fixed vocal attack on “Carry me” at 1:53.
3. Extended the fadeout slightly.